TOEFL 写作满分方法论：写作里的“一鱼两做” 满分写作班再次升级"

前面讲了点题，今天来讲讲例子的一鱼两做，

在正式介绍之前，我们先来看一下一个真正把握住得分点的写作课是如何高效帮助你提分的：

写作培训前的几次考试：

十一集训后的一次考试：

当天的大作文思路：

LAB在宣传的时候一直强调的都是学习和工作环境，很少去说我们的教学能力和教学成果。原因是我们会觉得在这个行业这些东西是前提，并且我自大的认为，在这个行业里，我们几个人就是效果和高分的保障。

当然慢慢、慢慢我们会发现，自己还是太年轻了。就像你觉得很难吃的面馆还是会有生意，你觉得3流的演员还是拿着一流的剧本，人们的决定想来是非理性的。

所以，我们也要别扭的和大家间歇的分享一些成绩，一些我们内心深处觉得没什么要夸耀的东西。为了减少我的这种不适感，还烦请大家转需啊。

以下是我们“一鱼两做”写作方法的展开，

什么叫一鱼两做呢，就是一条鱼，两种做法。比如鱼头做汤，鱼身红烧...

TOEFL的例子展开也可以这么用，

灵感来自于一位我们最近的10，11月的几次考试的大作文都拿到了good，并且是4.5 + 的小美女考生。

题目：

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

When you have been friends with someone for a long time, it is important to continue your friendship with that person even if he or she does something you do not like.

先来看一下文章的让步段：

Surely, people may feel unhappy when their friends do something they do not like, and it is hard for people to continue their friendship. For instance, my brother’s friend took my brother’s laptop without asking him. Because he thought that they had been friends for a long time, it is no need for him to ask my brother. However, after my brother knew it, he was very angry. He did not like people bring his things without asking. He thinks this behavior is very impolite. So my brother had an argument with his old friends. And they still do not talk to each other for quite a long-period of time. In this light, it is hard for people to maintain friendship with other people who made something that they do not like.

首先从文章结构上来说，第一句是很好的点题，段末还有一个总结。

但是我们这里要强调的是，例子部分用了一个自己编的例子，用的语言是相对直白的，而且还会有些小瑕疵，但这些都不会阻碍你拿到哪怕30的满分。

这个例子从对应性上来说，很好的展开了如果朋友做一些让另外一方不开心的事情，友谊会受到影响的观点。

但这一点依然不是我们今天讲解的重点，前面开始的时候说了，我们今天要强调的是例子的一鱼两做。现在我们来看下下一段：

However, it is 重不重要取决于有米有好处, 所以这里要改为 old friends 之间的矛盾会解决的。【it is rational to think that the contradiction between the old friends will sooner or later solved 】Since they have experience and encounter various issues. They know how to have a communication and talk to each other face to face to solve the problem. Telling each other which thing they do not like and which thing they like. In this way, they can understand each other more than before. Take the same example of my brother and his friend. After a long time, they had a communication. My brother told his friend about his feelings and why he behaved like that. Then his friend felt very sorry and apologized to him. Also, his friend promised that he would not do this thing again. After that communication, they became friends again. In this regard, it is better for old friends to find a good way to solve the problem instead of breaking the friendship.

这一段的第一句原先有点瑕疵，不够直接点题。但是要真正强调的是黄色highlight 的部分，这个部分再次利用了上段中的例子。这种一个例子，几处用的方法，有些考生可能会觉得重复了，这一点大可不必担心，因为展开的detail 是不一样的，只是角色相同，和重复是完全不同的概念。

另外，通过一条主线的反复用，让段与段之间内容上的coherence 变的特别好。同时也让文章的易读性得以提升。

所以，如果你在写作的时候也刚好有类似的思路，不妨也一试啊。

这里宣布一个关于我们的TOEFL 写作线上满分班的通知。

我们11月的线上班会依然如期在15日和大家见面，除了常规的写作的那些资料，因为在前面几期也一直发现大家在听力上存在的一些短板，这次课程特别配套了听力的结构和笔记提高的班级。

每天早上是写作课，晚上是听力的结构和笔记增强课程，最重要的是价格不变，还是￥699 的满分写作班的价，写作班的老学员，还是半价￥350 哦。

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