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Now more students at school cheat assignment than before. Which of the following do you think is the most effective way to prevent this?

Ask parents to supervise

Increase punishment

Assign homework which is hard for students to cheat

Yvette老师视频点评

<img alt="20170917托福考试写作范例＆点评" onload="javascript:ImgReSize(this)" class="imgcenter" src="http://img5.shadafang.com/img.php?http://mmbiz.qpic.cn/mmbiz_gif/povwzFTHUyGMDhtxQo3Jb5wpzhHmsCBVWRZSuDb0OVjb2cxKXsMwEm1bqKjm2pqWa3YUG6KtOBMNYOkz9c5BaA/0?wx_fmt=gif" /><br /></p><p style = "font-size:18px"><img alt="20170917托福考试写作范例＆点评" onload="javascript:ImgReSize(this)" class="imgcenter" src="http://img5.shadafang.com/img.php?http://mmbiz.qpic.cn/mmbiz_jpg/eFpwYZicORA7jVic8fMZR0dKOsP3u3f4eqBuvNWtD1J5MCryMoMvmSezB9xe8LrPMYF4b76YTssV6RSCfbSwkicXw/0?wx_fmt=jpeg" /><br /></p><p style = "font-size:18px"><strong><strong><strong> Yvette老师范例</strong></strong></strong></p><p style = "font-size:18px">Currently, schools have witnessed an increasing rate of cheating among students， so several ways that may help reducing the occurrence of such phenomena come into sight. Some contend that requiring parents to keep an eye on their children while they are doing homework or upgrading the difficulty of the assignment can serve the purpose. However, I believe that the heavy punishment imposed on cheating students is the most effective approach. <br /><br /></p><p style = "font-size:18px">Enabling students to be more aware of the seriousness of cheating, harsher punishment can immediately cut the rate of academic misconduct. That the young attempt to copy others’ homework or any other sources on the Internet is mainly because they are eager to gain a high score without actually infusing any personal efforts. If there were no more severe penalty for such kind of behavior, this shortcut would only be spread as a “smart trick” among students. Then the value that one can also achieve what he wants without necessary endeavor could soon become so popular that people would attach increasingly less importance to originality and self-made success, which is absolutely detrimental to shaping teenagers’ personality, as well as social development. Just as the law has the deterrent force to warn people to avoid doing the illegal stuff, to draw up stricter punishment such as removing cheating ones from school and leaving a permanent record in their files can make students realize that there will be a consequence for cheating too serious for them to bear. Therefore, they will not even think about it. Compared to the rule in China that if the examinee is caught cheating, only the result of that specific subject will be invalid, the United States follow a set of more rigorous rules. Once a student copies others’ assignment, he will be expelled from the school and a foreign student is also forced to leave America within 15 days. As can be seen, the originality in American culture enjoys an obvious advantage over others’, to which forbidding plagiarism contributes a lot. </p><p style = "font-size:18px">Admittedly, parents’ supervision can prevent children from cheating to some extent, but the scope that parents can reach is limited to home, so students can also take advantage of their time at school and in other places to have a look at other classmates’ work. Therefore, it cannot fundamentally eliminate the psychology of depending on others’ working result. Besides, some resort to the method that the teachers and professors can design more difficult homework, which requires more individual and creative thinking, but a closer look at this reveals a more complex picture. On the one hand, since it is the students’ fault to even have the thought to cheat, by no means should teachers increase their work load to constantly come up with new and carefully designed tests. On the other hand, students can always figure out new ways to deal with new tasks, which is not supposed to be the primary concern for studying. </p><p style = "font-size:18px">To sum up, the inspection from parents and specially programed tasks from teachers are merely temporary solutions to the general phenomenon of cheating. To really approach the problem of high cheating rate, raising the cost of this sort of misconduct is recommended the most. </p><p style = "font-size:18px"><strong>解析</strong></p><p style = "font-size:18px"><strong>思路简述</strong></p><p style = "font-size:18px">在写这个三选一类的题目时，在正文中必须要将三个选项全部提到。因为正面观点都相对好像，所以我们决定最终支持哪一个选项更要看，哪两个选项更加好反驳。比如家长监督的缺点显而易见，就是家长只能管到学生在家里的时间；加重处罚就没有想到好的反驳的点，那先pass；最后一个选项，让老师出不好作弊的作业，反驳它的理由一方面是，作弊是学生的锅为什么要让老师来背呢；另一方面，学生也总能想出应对的策略，也不能有效降低作弊率。于是就选择支持第二个，作弊其实就是学生们想不劳而获，而加重处罚其实就像法律一样，具有震慑力，让学生们不敢去作弊，甚至不敢有这个念头。这样也有利于学生价值观的树立和原创性的培养。例子我们可以对比一下对作弊处罚轻和重的两个国家，其学术原创性的高低差异很大一部分就来源于此。</p><p style = "font-size:18px"><strong>文章结构</strong></p><p style = "font-size:18px"><strong>Introduction</strong></p><p style = "font-size:18px">introduce the background+other options+ your choice</p><p style = "font-size:18px"><strong>Body 1</strong></p><p style = "font-size:18px">增加对作弊的处罚更有效的原因：让学生意识到作弊后果的严重性</p><p style = "font-size:18px"><strong>Body 2</strong></p><p style = "font-size:18px">另外两个选项没那么有效的原因：</p><p style = "font-size:18px">家长监督：监督范围小</p><p style = "font-size:18px">老师出难以作弊的题：增加老师不必要的工作量；学生也会想出新对策</p><p style = "font-size:18px"><strong>Conclusion</strong> </p><p style = "font-size:18px">重申立场和总结分论点</p><p style = "font-size:18px"><strong>重点词汇</strong></p><li><p style = "font-size:18px"><strong>Endeavor  vi.&vt. 尝试，试图  n.努力</strong></p><p style = "font-size:18px">e.g. We endeavor to make our customer satisfied.</p></li><li><p style = "font-size:18px"><strong>Expel   v. 驱逐</strong></p><p style = "font-size:18px">e.g. More than five-thousand secondary school students have been expelled for cheating.</p></li><li><p style = "font-size:18px"><strong>Rigorous   adj. 严格的</strong></p><p style = "font-size:18px">e.g. The planes have to undergo rigorous safety checks.</p><p style = "font-size:18px">Taxis must conform to the rigorous standards laid down by the police. </p></li><li><p style = "font-size:18px"><strong>Smart trick   聪明的伎俩</strong></p><p style = "font-size:18px">e.g. That’s a cute trick.</p><p style = "font-size:18px">Companies are using every trick in the book to stay one step in front of their competitors. </p></li><li><p style = "font-size:18px"><strong>Plagiarism  n. 剽窃，抄袭</strong></p><p style = "font-size:18px">e.g. The content of his book is no more than plagiarism.</p></li><p style = "font-size:18px"><img alt="20170917托福考试写作范例＆点评" onload="javascript:ImgReSize(this)" class="imgcenter" src="http://img5.shadafang.com/img.php?http://mmbiz.qpic.cn/mmbiz_png/povwzFTHUyE5iakoiadaicUarnHQIcSFM2CNKQI1ic67tic435gxO9rR1z5E3BzfFiaHMHu6dpLbDsMXL6IwGibtF5O2w/640?wx_fmt=png" /><br /></p><p style = "font-size:18px"><img alt="20170917托福考试写作范例＆点评" onload="javascript:ImgReSize(this)" class="imgcenter" src="http://img5.shadafang.com/img.php?http://mmbiz.qpic.cn/mmbiz_png/eFpwYZicORA6Hk8Sbgtpu7kbgosLOjfErJWViaE1vXeEsdxV3km88EHZ2sq1QPXgXvGVRC2SA4XsN31swNZDT75A/640?wx_fmt=png" /><br /></p><p style = 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